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talk:alcheringa:1-1:praises_of_the_bantu_kings_26 [2021/06/16 15:27] – created admintalk:alcheringa:1-1:praises_of_the_bantu_kings_26 [2021/07/09 02:30] (current) – admin
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 +I have a few minor suggestions: The section you have in the commentary section may do better in the context section. Personally, I have been using the commentary section to add a more personal note about the piece (like how I interpreted it or something,) and the context section has been for the facts I have discovered throughout researching it. 
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 +Also, when you give the translations of the poems for the second one, i would clarify the description you give. As the reader, it is confusing. You say things like "this praise song was third and final" but you then go on to list 4 other poems. So, I would just try to clarify that. 
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 +Other than that, it looks great! Good job!
 + --- //[[vdpcc@iup.edu|Mikenna]] 2021/06/16 15:35//
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 +Hi Mikenna, thanks for the suggestion. I tried to reword the short description of praise poem 2 and clarified in the overview section that each of the praise poems included come from separate/distinct ceremonies or events. Does that seem a little less confusing? If not, please let me know and I'll try to restructure again. Thanks.
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 +This is very well done, including lots of rich information. 
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 +Two things might clarify. Somewhere -- note that Rothenberg has created "versions" which are not straight or literal translations, they are a bit "free." 
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 +Second:  it looks like you went to the original source for the source languages AND literal translation. That's brilliant, very useful. But it's not 100% clear from the text that's what we're getting here -- and I think it adds value to make that a bit more clear!  Maybe an intro note saying, the following is from .... etc.
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 +Is it noteworthy that Rothenberg's versions strip some of the name and historical specificity? 
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