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This is looking good so far. I'll have more comments soon.

— admin 2021/06/16 15:26

I have a few minor suggestions: The section you have in the commentary section may do better in the context section. Personally, I have been using the commentary section to add a more personal note about the piece (like how I interpreted it or something,) and the context section has been for the facts I have discovered throughout researching it.

Also, when you give the translations of the poems for the second one, i would clarify the description you give. As the reader, it is confusing. You say things like “this praise song was third and final” but you then go on to list 4 other poems. So, I would just try to clarify that.

Other than that, it looks great! Good job! — Mikenna 2021/06/16 15:35

Hi Mikenna, thanks for the suggestion. I tried to reword the short description of praise poem 2 and clarified in the overview section that each of the praise poems included come from separate/distinct ceremonies or events. Does that seem a little less confusing? If not, please let me know and I'll try to restructure again. Thanks.

— Haley E. Brown 2021/06/16 16:05